Comments on: Stories http://pxstories.wordpress.com Just another WordPress.com weblog Mon, 18 Aug 2008 18:46:49 +0000 http://wordpress.com/ hourly 1 By: Alex http://pxstories.wordpress.com/stories/#comment-4 Alex Mon, 18 Aug 2008 18:46:49 +0000 http://pxstories.wordpress.com/?page_id=3#comment-4 Your blog is interesting! Keep up the good work! Your blog is interesting!

Keep up the good work!

]]> By: Tradanbattlan http://pxstories.wordpress.com/stories/#comment-3 Tradanbattlan Sat, 16 Aug 2008 15:55:56 +0000 http://pxstories.wordpress.com/?page_id=3#comment-3 Awesome! Awesome!

]]> By: Emrise http://pxstories.wordpress.com/stories/#comment-2 Emrise Fri, 15 Aug 2008 13:36:26 +0000 http://pxstories.wordpress.com/?page_id=3#comment-2 Not bad, your portrayal of the human Headquarters is kind of like the scenes in D.Gray-Man in the Headquarters of the Black Order. (Translation unsure, since it's a Japanese anime) Comedical-ishy. One complaint would be that the chunk of text describing the various weaponry systems and whatnot is extremely painful for me to read, so I just skimmed that part. Paragraphing is VERY IMPORTANT! That, and it allows people to differentiate between different speakers easier if you don't want to end all your "speaky" sentences with ' ," he said/whatever'. But overall, not bad for a casual writer. Go PX Go! Whee! Good luck, Emrise Not bad, your portrayal of the human Headquarters is kind of like the scenes in D.Gray-Man in the Headquarters of the Black Order. (Translation unsure, since it’s a Japanese anime) Comedical-ishy.

One complaint would be that the chunk of text describing the various weaponry systems and whatnot is extremely painful for me to read, so I just skimmed that part.

Paragraphing is VERY IMPORTANT! That, and it allows people to differentiate between different speakers easier if you don’t want to end all your “speaky” sentences with ‘ ,” he said/whatever’.

But overall, not bad for a casual writer.

Go PX Go! Whee!

Good luck,
Emrise

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